Dear Chris Robinson,
Please stop plugging yourself into all your articles. You get some good information, but if I see another "I" in your articles I'll rip my goddamn hair out. This is what your lead should be:
"Top Rank CEO Bob Arum said Tuesday at the Veintanian Hotel Casino that the opponent for Nonito Donaire would be decided by Friday and that the obligations to HBO prevented the fight with WBC titlist Anber Mares from happening."
It might be a little wordy, but the lead of an article should be 25-30 words and get straight to the point. Don't include that Arum told you it. Same goes for "I pressed him further" just say "When pressed further, Arum said blah blah"
Sincerely,
A journalism student
Please stop plugging yourself into all your articles. You get some good information, but if I see another "I" in your articles I'll rip my goddamn hair out. This is what your lead should be:
"Top Rank CEO Bob Arum said Tuesday at the Veintanian Hotel Casino that the opponent for Nonito Donaire would be decided by Friday and that the obligations to HBO prevented the fight with WBC titlist Anber Mares from happening."
It might be a little wordy, but the lead of an article should be 25-30 words and get straight to the point. Don't include that Arum told you it. Same goes for "I pressed him further" just say "When pressed further, Arum said blah blah"
Sincerely,
A journalism student
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